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June 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was a cute story! ^_^
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June 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was so freaking awesome. Keep up the great work. ^_^
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June 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very nice and very HOT!!!! Will there be a sequel?
There were a couple grammar mistakes here and there, but they didn't take away from the story.
Keep up the good work!
There were a couple grammar mistakes here and there, but they didn't take away from the story.
Keep up the good work!
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Love it! I'd love to see you continue it^^
As for critique...I have absolutely no comments for your organization of plot, which was splendid. I guess if I had to come up with something it would be to 1) get rid of the A/N's... if you want to put them at the end that's fine but they can be distracting to the story (especially during a sex scene), and 2) more sex plzkthx ^_~
*applauds*
As for critique...I have absolutely no comments for your organization of plot, which was splendid. I guess if I had to come up with something it would be to 1) get rid of the A/N's... if you want to put them at the end that's fine but they can be distracting to the story (especially during a sex scene), and 2) more sex plzkthx ^_~
*applauds*
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
lol, nice ficcie here. you could have continue the lemon thought ....
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Haha, poor naruto, what did he get himself into? yes, good thing that naruto wo't likyl be on top!
sasunaru-ness(some narusasu is okay) there were some grammar problems, but i really don't mind
just pretty much telling you. =) i iked how naruto had to tippy toe, indicating sort cuteness! haha
good jo, i forgot if this was labeled one shot or not, but keep up the good work for future chapters
or stories.
sasunaru-ness(some narusasu is okay) there were some grammar problems, but i really don't mind
just pretty much telling you. =) i iked how naruto had to tippy toe, indicating sort cuteness! haha
good jo, i forgot if this was labeled one shot or not, but keep up the good work for future chapters
or stories.
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
lol. i reallylike this fic. although i was a bit confused. cause i thought Kakashi was looking at Sasuke and Naruto "bonding" but then i realized that it was after the whole event. XD hahah. XP is there another chapter to it?? lol. i hope there is. i wanna read more. hehe n___n . if there is another chappi. plz update soon. n______________n
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Mouahahaha!!!AWSOME!!!!
SooOoooo funny! Jeez I couldn't stop laughing!
I didn't think Naruto would be so submissive though...(Not that I mind..Nyaaa^^...just took me by surprise)
I LOVED IT really great
Keep on going!^_^
See ya
SooOoooo funny! Jeez I couldn't stop laughing!
I didn't think Naruto would be so submissive though...(Not that I mind..Nyaaa^^...just took me by surprise)
I LOVED IT really great
Keep on going!^_^
See ya