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sexy :D

I really adored this. It was a beautiful examination of their relationship and their rivalry and their dynamics as lovers. You did an excellent job with description. VERY VIVID. I loved it!

(I review as I read.)
Dang, interesting beginning. I like the metaphor. . . . I like the slow picture of the scene forming. Just little by little, the scene becomes more and more clear to the reader. . . . I’m a little confused, but the story’s interesting. . . . Very poetic. . . . Some of the colors used in description earlier were kind of confusing. I think you were going for one thing, and I was getting a different image or something. It’s coming more clear now, though. . . . Whoops, “With a grin dancing across his hips” You mean “lips.” . . . “The concept was mutual. “It was the truth.” Good point. . . . I’m a little confused when the POV wavers from one to the other. It’s kind of hard to tell who’s thinking what. But maybe that’s the point? . . . Oh, that’s a good one: “a title that the guy never allowed him to use.” . . . This is cool.
This is one of the most poetic stories I’ve read. B E A U T I F U L.

This was good. A few parts were confiusing as to who was thinking. But the whole thing was Naruto, right? I really like the part with the headband, how Naruto held it and left for a few days to have it be like new, but it still had finger marks... I hope you write a lot more stories. I agree there aren't enough Narusasu stories; and definately not enough where they're both in character.

really well written. im glad i read it. :)

so. very. amazingly. hot.....wow.....i mean it too....that was just wow.....

That was beautiful. Excellent characterization.

Men and our power games,in this case justified.Wonderful vocabulary.Solid grip on the dynamic of these two.Kudos.Stages Avenger?

what can i say it was powerful,poetic! Damn good job!

i love it!!! Fabulous job!!! Very poetic ^^