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April 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Interesting story so far. Over all I've got to say that I'm looking forward to seeing how it turns out. There is however one minor problem that I found. You forgot tthe word "have" when she says "you'll the demon of KONOHA to deal with."
LOL Other then that good job.
LOL Other then that good job.
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March 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
where is the hentai
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February 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
EXCELLENT!! The story is starting to pick up and is getting good. A few minor typos that need to be beta'd out but great job. I plan to follow this piece.
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February 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is a very good start but i would suggest a few things, a little more detail and if possible that the chapters be a little bit longer.
Overall though its still good
Overall though its still good
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February 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like the title...I was thinking along the lines of the same thing. I hope you will be able to continue this story. It has a lot of potential to be an awesome piece! Please e-mail me if you needed help with the beta-ing.
Xenobia (snleopard@hotmail.com)
Xenobia (snleopard@hotmail.com)
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January 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm...this is a good story and I'd love to help you with a title. But, honestly, I think I need one more chapter to come up with it.
Can you send me an e-mail with spoiler details...I really want to help.
snleopard@hotmail.com
Can you send me an e-mail with spoiler details...I really want to help.
snleopard@hotmail.com