rate_review Reviews

This story is getting really good. Please continue!!

I can honesty say that when I first came across this story, I did not think I would like it! I was so wrong!! This fic is so awesome!!

thats cute, too cute for words.hope you get the time to update.
i give you props for your progress

hope you continue this is interesting

Hot!!! I love the story so far! Sasuke is very determined, huh? :D

GREAT! Sasunaru fluff is the best. ^-^

Intersting first chapter. Please continue!!!

this story has alot of potential and is really cute ^_^ please continue

Please don't make him too une-ish and submissive. A defiant Naruto is a good thing. (ie:when they're having sex or when sasuke is attempting to seduce him him doesn't just give in. Have it take a while. Also, maybe have Sasuke feel kindof out of control during sex instead of naruto at times, so naruto can have fun teasing him)
Important things to remember when writing yaoi

~three fingers are not the requirement. Guys even prefer more sometimes.
~Lube is not always necessary. The first few times yeah, but after that saliva or semen is just is good. And it doesn't require that much. A lot of the time, they just do it without lube.
~Guys switch being top and bottom. There isn't usually a set role. Sometimes one will prefer to be one but they still switch.
~The prostate requires some stimulation before allowing pleasure. It isn't 'hit it right off and and white hot heat'Not normally anyway.
Hope this helps.
~The Flame Reviews~