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August 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
cool. It has a sad but good start.
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August 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like you, i really like you..lol :D
your first fanfic and you did a really good job!
Chapter 1 made me wanna cry but i'm sure
before it's all over with i will be smiling like crazy.
Anyways...i'd love to read more so please update?
I really liked the part where Kyuubi told Naruto he
is like a son to him and held him...so sweet.
your first fanfic and you did a really good job!
Chapter 1 made me wanna cry but i'm sure
before it's all over with i will be smiling like crazy.
Anyways...i'd love to read more so please update?
I really liked the part where Kyuubi told Naruto he
is like a son to him and held him...so sweet.
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August 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ooohhhh! damn good cliff hanger!
more more more, please more!
nice flow, though honestly. only saw one small mistake - didn't separate pov's like you were in the beginning, right after sasuke dragged the man to the railing and demanded to know where naruto was - you went straight to naruto's pov
other than that - very damn good - hope you right more soon
more more more, please more!
nice flow, though honestly. only saw one small mistake - didn't separate pov's like you were in the beginning, right after sasuke dragged the man to the railing and demanded to know where naruto was - you went straight to naruto's pov
other than that - very damn good - hope you right more soon
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August 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
write more i like it alot
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August 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good start! I wanna read more. Please update soon!^^