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Eeeek! Update please! What's happening to Naruto? I have to knooooow! DX

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AAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHH! Evil Cliffie! Good job. You are now one of the masters of the cliffhangers. THis story has me hooked. I cant wait for the next chapter.

Please do continue with it. The beginning is rather funny and I want to know what's coming up next! And SasuxNaru is my favorite pairing.

Yep it's worthy. ;P
It sound really good please continue.

You have a good lead in but it definitely needs some work. The first chapter is a little clunky in spots in terms of your structure and plot.

Naruto comes across as a little too whiny and this raises the question of his age.
If he's 15/16... then a little bratty behavior is acceptable but if he's older... it may be construed as OOC behavior for Naruto as an adult.

A summary for your story is crucial. It's the first thing readers see. If you have a tough time writing summaries... keep it simple. Put up a short description of what is going to happen in your story. Some authors use this section as a chapter lead in... just don't put up I suck at summaries. There is no bigger story killer than that.

If you need someone to read over what you have or just offer some common sense advice - just drop me a line. My email address is on my author's profile.

- katsuyo

I'm looking forward to reading more.

This story shows much promise. I'm guessing its after Sasuke comes back from Orochimaru. Please continue. please. Dont make me use chibi kyuubi-naruto on you. I will. I an that evil!

u definitely should continue this :)