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@____@ I-- just today-- posted a story called Dreams about Kotetsu and Izumo, pre-series, as they're preparing to take the chuunin exam. It's very different from this story, but if I'd seen this story before I would have at least given mine a different title. I'm so sorry! I wrote mine following a prompt for a Kotetsu/Izumo contest over at y!gallery (where I spend most of my online time). The prompt I chose was dreams, and I just made that the title. I'd change it, but it's already submitted to the contest there, posted to my LJ, etc. I swear to you I've never seen this story before right now, and our stories are quite different. I still feel terrible.

If you have a chance, please skim through my story and let me know if you have a comfort level with both of us having stories with the same title, having to do with characters preparing for the chuunin exam. If you'd prefer that I change my title or even take the story down I'd be happy to do that, since you wrote yours first. I've never had this happen before ^^;; and I really do feel awful.

As far as a review goes, your story is adorable, hot, and very fun. I love how you've written Lee. I have no idea how to write him without turning him into a caricature, but you did a fantastic job.

I liked it but it was so short *whimpers*

might be because I love long and smutty fics >_>;

still it was a good piece :D

Cute. I do feel sorry for someone that has to do so much laundry...Nicely done, especially the innuendo.

Mmm, okay, I have decided this story was pretty cute, and well written as far as grammar and diction goes. However, it read more like a summary than an actual story! Summarizing the beginning to set the stage worked (although it would have been nice to get a little more details on those dreams' content, ehh, ehh? >:3 ) but starting when Lee and Gaara met up during Lee's "punishment," the fic would have been a lot better if you'd switched into a more descriptive narrative style. You added a little more detail, like Lee looking kinda cute and innocent, and Gaara's reaction to his prostrate form, and just those few details improved a lot upon the story. Imagine if you fleshed this story out even more, and wrote a few pages of interaction instead of a few paragraphs. And of course, I would have liked a little more "action" if ya know what I mean, between Lee and Gaara. *wink*