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March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
MORE PLEASE!
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March 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It's a great start, but I suggest a beta who knows grammar. You have a lot of difficulties with getting has/have to match with the subjects. If it's plural, you use have. If it's singular, you use has. Example: Naruto has a lot of difficulties with class since he cannot read or write. Example Two: We have a lot of problems because of that boy. Example Three: Team Seven has issues with teamwork.
See? It's just getting things to match.
Content wise - the story is wonderful. My question is, will you deal with the aftermath of what Mizuki has done to Naruto?
See? It's just getting things to match.
Content wise - the story is wonderful. My question is, will you deal with the aftermath of what Mizuki has done to Naruto?
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March 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow. This story is EXCELLENT!
There is so much dark potential. Naruto's excited musings at the end of the chapter were wonderfully brilliant. Everything about this introductory chapter was great. I hope you do decide to continue it. I'm eagerly looking forward to what comes next! ^^
There is so much dark potential. Naruto's excited musings at the end of the chapter were wonderfully brilliant. Everything about this introductory chapter was great. I hope you do decide to continue it. I'm eagerly looking forward to what comes next! ^^