rate_review Reviews

this story had me laughing so hard lol. frilly panties!!! lol. jiriaya is such a perv lol. iruka is such a teaser lol. te way it ended has me wondering who the title was really aimed at. lol. great.

cutee

nice one shot.

*gigglesnort* I loved reading this again. Man, the line: "He had great hair!" almost did me in. And I'm at work. Reading your writing at work is unhealthy for my co-workers' opinions of me when I spray coffee all over my monitor and cackle hysterically. I lurve you.

~animeaddict666

Your writing is good. The resolution to your conflict was hilariously funny. I find the idea of Jiraiya/Iruka sexy. But Jiraiya forgoing the debauchery of a festival to train Naruto? So unbelievable it made Iruka's pretty pink panties look like canon. I think you would be better off with a different intial conflict, like maybe Iruka needs to stop Jiraiya from corrupting Naruto in some way. Although that would be trite. Hrm. Well, I see your dilemma, but Jiraiya wants a night off to get drunk and screw. Not train Naruto!

LOL This was great! really! XD
and i think Jiraiya is still the dumbest, for falling for such a little show! XD