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October 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hurry please! i want to read the lemon! ive noticed that i have too much blood and need a way to get rid of it without mutilating my body in anyway. (the mind doesnt count even though it doesnt bleed...)
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hooray! Everybody wins in this chapter.
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
yo T.W.! wonderful work as always! keep going girl!! keep Itachi by you always!
laters! ~_^
laters! ~_^
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
and before i forget completely:
HAPPY BIRTHDAY TRULYWICKED!!!!!
i hope that makes your day!
laters! ~_^
HAPPY BIRTHDAY TRULYWICKED!!!!!
i hope that makes your day!
laters! ~_^
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 2: Tee-hee. That first image of Naruto swan-diving into the bed was cute. ^_^ . . . . (*sigh*) She could’ve at least knocked and told them that through the door. u_u
Another piercing? . . . . Aha. Tattoo. (*blinks*) That’s mean. . . . Thanks for making the artist sensitive. That helps.
Hee hee, lemme guess: Naruto’s distracting Sasuke while Kyuubi does some trick to—yup. . . . That was sweet of Sasuke to take the collar off. . . . I wonder how long the etiquette is going to last. I’d give it two-and-a-half minutes. . . . Wow. That was short. But interesting.
Mean, leaving the chapter there. I kind of expected it, since the prequel was also 3 chapters, but stillllll. . . .
By the way, what was the tattoo of? It said where but not what.
Another piercing? . . . . Aha. Tattoo. (*blinks*) That’s mean. . . . Thanks for making the artist sensitive. That helps.
Hee hee, lemme guess: Naruto’s distracting Sasuke while Kyuubi does some trick to—yup. . . . That was sweet of Sasuke to take the collar off. . . . I wonder how long the etiquette is going to last. I’d give it two-and-a-half minutes. . . . Wow. That was short. But interesting.
Mean, leaving the chapter there. I kind of expected it, since the prequel was also 3 chapters, but stillllll. . . .
By the way, what was the tattoo of? It said where but not what.
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July 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
(I review as I read.)
Chapter 1: So . . . how did Naruto get talked into doing this? . . . . Are we the readers ever going to find out that secret? Hehehe . . . . (*giggle*) Alright, Sasuke-sama. Karma, dude. Or payback. ^_^ . . . . Question: Is this going to be pretty much the same as the first story?
Heh. I wonder if Sakura and Kakashi forgot about the other time. ^_^ . . . . Why a straight man? So they won’t be ogling him? . . . . Why ugly? Someone ugly could still give you that lustful look, only it could be more unpleasant. . . . This girl’s speech sure is snooty. . . . Yup, they’re all Legendary. I liked that bit. ^_^ . . . . Boy, Sasuke’s plan is already backfiring on him. Bummer. This could be tense. . . . I like this bit: “Sasuke [. . .] rubbed his side while musing on the silencing effectiveness of Sakura’s pointy little elbow.” Hell yeah! Never underestimate our elbows, dude! (*holds elbow up proudly*) ^_^ . . . . Oh, that f***ing bitch.
That seriously f***ing bitch. . . . If she’s clinging to his arm, they can easily use the excuse that he can’t do his work if she’s using his arm. It would cost a little of his pride (which I’m sure is suffering greatly right now) but it would be worth it. . . . Hah! Good one, Naruto. (I’m so proud. *smug*)
I like the bit about saying “no” but tracing out “yes.” . . . . What timing—being attacked right then. . . . “[. . .] as he ran to kill Yukari.” (*cough*let ‘im*COUGH*) . . . . Feeling guilty already? Bummer. (Sorry, but that was awfully quick. I get the feeling that since her earlier activities didn’t mean anything, any concern she shows for anybody is just as meaningless.)
Ummm . . . it . . . could’ve been better. I thought Yukari came off as pretty shallow, and I’m amazed that Sakura could’ve found any friendship with her, shared interests in medicine or not.
Chapter 1: So . . . how did Naruto get talked into doing this? . . . . Are we the readers ever going to find out that secret? Hehehe . . . . (*giggle*) Alright, Sasuke-sama. Karma, dude. Or payback. ^_^ . . . . Question: Is this going to be pretty much the same as the first story?
Heh. I wonder if Sakura and Kakashi forgot about the other time. ^_^ . . . . Why a straight man? So they won’t be ogling him? . . . . Why ugly? Someone ugly could still give you that lustful look, only it could be more unpleasant. . . . This girl’s speech sure is snooty. . . . Yup, they’re all Legendary. I liked that bit. ^_^ . . . . Boy, Sasuke’s plan is already backfiring on him. Bummer. This could be tense. . . . I like this bit: “Sasuke [. . .] rubbed his side while musing on the silencing effectiveness of Sakura’s pointy little elbow.” Hell yeah! Never underestimate our elbows, dude! (*holds elbow up proudly*) ^_^ . . . . Oh, that f***ing bitch.
That seriously f***ing bitch. . . . If she’s clinging to his arm, they can easily use the excuse that he can’t do his work if she’s using his arm. It would cost a little of his pride (which I’m sure is suffering greatly right now) but it would be worth it. . . . Hah! Good one, Naruto. (I’m so proud. *smug*)
I like the bit about saying “no” but tracing out “yes.” . . . . What timing—being attacked right then. . . . “[. . .] as he ran to kill Yukari.” (*cough*let ‘im*COUGH*) . . . . Feeling guilty already? Bummer. (Sorry, but that was awfully quick. I get the feeling that since her earlier activities didn’t mean anything, any concern she shows for anybody is just as meaningless.)
Ummm . . . it . . . could’ve been better. I thought Yukari came off as pretty shallow, and I’m amazed that Sakura could’ve found any friendship with her, shared interests in medicine or not.
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July 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You end the story with the looking forward to a hot bath... then including in nothing about the bath??!!?? O_O I demand smutty epilogues!!!
lol... no, i kid. ^^ The story was very cute. It started similar to the original, although definately veered off once they went on the mission. Naruto's blackmail inspired outfit was never mentioned again. I would have atleast expected their client to be taken aback by Naruto's unconventional attire before putting her moves on him.. but nothing was mentioned. Those critiques aside, I lived for the moment when Naruto confessed his feelings to Sasuke, chiding him about how his life would be meaningless without him. It was a beautiful moment and very touching.
Keep up the good work. ^^
lol... no, i kid. ^^ The story was very cute. It started similar to the original, although definately veered off once they went on the mission. Naruto's blackmail inspired outfit was never mentioned again. I would have atleast expected their client to be taken aback by Naruto's unconventional attire before putting her moves on him.. but nothing was mentioned. Those critiques aside, I lived for the moment when Naruto confessed his feelings to Sasuke, chiding him about how his life would be meaningless without him. It was a beautiful moment and very touching.
Keep up the good work. ^^