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April 15, 2016 at 12:00 AM
NICE! ADD MORE PLEASE!
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July 18, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I love where this is going. You have a nice start so far, and I would love to read more!
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June 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
When does the fun start?
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May 22, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Nice writing! Hoping to see more chapters soon :D
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May 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Hey,
You're a talented writer, and I want to know what happens, but the chapters are way too short. You don't need to make a new chapter for a tiny fragment of conversation--in fact, please don't. It'd be much better if you saved up segments until you had a good 2-3k words, and published that all at once instead in a single installment.
Also, frankly, this is an adult fiction site; it's generally not worth posting unless there's sexual tension at a minimum.
You're a talented writer, and I want to know what happens, but the chapters are way too short. You don't need to make a new chapter for a tiny fragment of conversation--in fact, please don't. It'd be much better if you saved up segments until you had a good 2-3k words, and published that all at once instead in a single installment.
Also, frankly, this is an adult fiction site; it's generally not worth posting unless there's sexual tension at a minimum.